Reduced wordiness and formality

piperchester · piperchester · commit 41a6d2628f48 · 2014-09-10T17:47:51.000-07:00
diff --git a/index.html b/index.html
@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@
   <div class="inner container">
       <img class="logo" src="/assets/images/coderit_logo2.svg" alt="codeRIT" title="codeRIT" />
       <h1>Information Session - September 10, 2014</h3>
-      <h3 class="subtitle">Come by and see what we are all about.</h3>
+      <h3 class="subtitle">Come by and see what we're all about.</h3>
       <p>GOL-1400<br/>6&#58;00 PM<br/></p>
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@@ -19,31 +19,31 @@ <h3 class="subtitle">Come by and see what we are all about.</h3>
         <i class="fa fa-sitemap fa-stack-1x"></i>
         </span>
         <h3>Networking</h3>
-        <p>Meet new people with the same interests and work together to make awesome projects.</p>
+        <p>Meet like-minded creators. Forge relationships.</p>
       </div>
       <div class="col center">
         <span class="fa-stack fa-5x">
         <i class="fa fa-circle-thin fa-stack-2x"></i>
         <i class="fa fa-group fa-stack-1x"></i>
         </span>
         <h3>Community</h3>
-        <p>Learn from other students and explore new opportunities right here on campus.</p>
+        <p>Join your peers and ignite RIT's hacking culture.</p>
       </div>
       <div class="col center">
         <span class="fa-stack fa-5x">
         <i class="fa fa-circle-thin fa-stack-2x"></i>
         <i class="fa fa-rocket fa-stack-1x"></i>
         </span>
         <h3>Take Off</h3>
-        <p>Experience new hackathons across the nation with a team of friends building together.</p>
+        <p>Compete (or just build awesome stuff!) with codeRIT at hackathons across the Northeast.</p>
       </div>
     </div>
 </div>
 <div id="brickhack" class="banner">
   <div class="container">
     <h1>Brick Hack</h1>
-    <h3 class="subtitle">RIT's brand new hackathon</h3>
-    <p>Currently we are planning Brick Hack, and we need all hands on board and will take all the help we can get. If you are interested in joining one of our committees or getting involved a different way, please don't hesitate.</p>
+    <h3 class="subtitle">RIT's first official collegiate hackathon</h3>
+    <p>If you'd like to be a part of history, we could use your help. Don't hesitate to join us and help create something great.</p>
     <a class="button large" href="mailto:carl@coderit.org">Get Involved</a>
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@@ -52,8 +52,8 @@ <h3 class="subtitle">RIT's brand new hackathon</h3>
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         <h3>Get Information.</h3>
-        <p>If you want to learn more about our organization, please email our director.</p>
-        <a class="button" href="mailto:carl@coderit.org" rel="nofollow"><i class="fa fa-envelope"></i>Send an Email</a>
+        <p></p>
+        <a class="button" href="mailto:carl@coderit.org" rel="nofollow"><i class="fa fa-envelope"></i>Email us Directly</a>
       </div>
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         <h3>Stay Informed.</h3>
